Today we practised re-crafting a piece of writing. The first one belongs to Aldora and the second is mine.
“Oh my god” I said, I never knew cross country was going to be so hard and long. When I got half way I started to sprint so I could catch up to some girls but sadly I didn’t. I was getting closer to the finish line and I was so proud of myself.
Approaching half-way, I began to sprint. I felt exhausted , but I kept on running because I wanted to catch up to the other girls.Feeling gutted, I made my way closer to the finish line. I just wasn't fit enough to keep up with them. How fit do you think you are?
Hi Shalom,
ReplyDeleteI can see that you edited your paragraph very well. Great use of topic words I see.
I'm leaving now, so, bye!
Iisa.
Hi Shalom!
ReplyDeleteI'm a student in EDM310 at the University of South Alabama. Thank you so much for sharing this post with us. You're very talented at editing papers. This is such a great skill to have, because it will help you throughout all of your schooling. Keep up the good work! I've very excited to read more of your posts!